Goodbye to Sammie. The ending of a friendship

Category: Writers Block

Post 1 by Sage Rose (the Zone BBS remains forever my home page) on Thursday, 13-Dec-2007 20:32:40

Behind the curtain
There’s a me you haven’t seen
A place you’ve never been
Roads split
The darkness has wound itself around us
The light that found us has faded
I waited for the breath of acceptance
But the truths I told were lies to you
I fell through the threads of what we were
Collapsed , unknown
I’ve grown up
But not to you
You feel the ice, the jagged side
I can’t confide in you
The me you knew has died
Become more defined
Behind the curtain
I learn to live
But you won’t forgive me
You won’t let me breathe
I seem cold
Because you won’t let me exist as a whole
Control, always what you need to survive
Alive in my skin
Within the real me
I see you and I have died
Our friendship has been sacrificed for hatred
I said my goodbyes
There in lies my heart
On the right side of the road this time
My mind won’t rule me
But my heart said it was time to go
So I left you and your memory to drift where it might
Love not lost
But realization leading me to understanding
I will remember you
In my heart
But my life is not a part of you
Be true to yourself
And love with all of your heart
Goodbye.

Post 2 by TheAsianInvasion (The Zone's invader) on Thursday, 13-Dec-2007 23:05:53

awww...sad, but sweet. hugs

Post 3 by Sage Rose (the Zone BBS remains forever my home page) on Friday, 14-Dec-2007 14:57:34

Thanks. smile.

Post 4 by HotPerro (I live and breathe the board) on Friday, 14-Dec-2007 21:12:13

Very nice, something I can identify with from my past, for sure.

Post 5 by Selena Fan (Account disabled) on Saturday, 15-Dec-2007 1:53:58

Wow that was just sad.

Post 6 by singingsensation (I just keep on posting!) on Friday, 21-Dec-2007 22:49:43

sad poem, but very nice. It's something that I can relate to as well.

Post 7 by fiveberry (Generic Zoner) on Sunday, 23-Dec-2007 12:28:01

In my opinion it's sad, but nice as well. Hugs <3

Post 8 by Sage Rose (the Zone BBS remains forever my home page) on Monday, 31-Dec-2007 18:34:41

thanks

Post 9 by Siriusly Severus (The ESTJ 1w9 3w4 6w7 The Taskmaste) on Wednesday, 30-Jan-2008 20:23:23

You just need the punctuation at the end of every line. If one seems odd, then add a comma. Well, it's good otherwise.

Post 10 by dream lady (move over school!) on Friday, 01-Feb-2008 15:22:29

awesome
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Post 11 by Siriusly Severus (The ESTJ 1w9 3w4 6w7 The Taskmaste) on Friday, 01-Feb-2008 21:12:31

Lol! Yeah, it is with the punctuation intact. It's hard to read.